Human Nature

Published on March 23, 2005 By enigmagnetic In

who can define insanity
if we can't name morality
a weapon in hand
is still a gain for man
even in paradise
this is our sacrifice
human nature in its grandeur
offends many with its manner
survival of the fittest
is no test for the richest
nations in conflict
are turning a profit
why must we exist
with drives we cannot resist
until there is satifaction
violence will be the action

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on Apr 12, 2005

I dig the theme man, and maybe it's arrogant of me to try to critique anyone elses work cause I change up styles in the middle of poems if I get bored with it. This one is good in its simplicity but could always be elaborated on or incorporate multiple rhyme schemes at once.

"a loaded weapon in the same hand,
drawn in reaction to a misquoted lesson taught by the rich to the starving man,
if this is paradise, if our bliss is ignorance,
than I'll happily sacrifice my silence for an ear piercing resonance,
that's the sound of human nature in its grandeur,
when it's unbound from the leash offensive manners."

That's just another way to play with your words, I'm not suggesting these as corrections...just ideas.

Peace,
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